Realistic Fiction Review, Round 3

Praise for Dan's A School Day for Dominic

• I like how the character was mean at first, but by the end he was helping the kid he was mean to. 
• I like how you made the main character the bully instead of the bully being the person the main character dealt with.
• It was a good choice to have the story take place in only a day or two instead of five weeks, and you chose to have a narrator instead of the main character telling the story.
• I like how you made the character stammer every time he was nervous, that really showed that he was on the spot. It was great that you created a struggle for the main character and showed how he had to work through his own issues.

Praise for Ethan's Tornado Days

• I like that you used onomatopoeia words like, "Crack!" and then when he hugged his mom so hard he almost choked her. 
• I liked the description you used of the tornado and all the things that happened to him as he tried to escape, especially when you said "a light pole came flying down the stairs."
• That situation would have been SO scary for him...home alone with his cat when a tornado came, and not knowing where his mom is and whether or not she was safe. 
• At the very end you really showed all of the emotions the little boy had been dealing with, how they all came out at once, and how relief kind of washed over him at the end when he was reunited with his mom. 

Praise for Andy's Best Frenemies

• GREAT word choice: scrambled, hesitated, interrupted, yawned, rushed, forked, scuttled, banged, scurried
• I like how your story was a life lesson since you had two friends who got into a fight and had to figure out a way to become friends again. It was a very real story, so much that you almost feel like you want to cry with the character when they get into their fight.
• I liked how you described the characters, especially when Cal got to Joe's house and you expected him to be mad still. But then when Cal asks him to be friends again he screams, "Yes!"

Praise for Emily's Plans, Plans, and More Plans

• I liked how you lengthened your story and based it a little off of Dolphin Tale. That made the setting and storyline very unique and different from everyone else's story.
• I liked how the dialogue between the mom and the kids showed a lot of attitude. 
• I liked how you had so many characters but kept control of them. You were very descriptive in how you described the characters, what they were saying, the expressions on their faces... You could totally see Katelynn and her 3 siblings interacting. 
• The characters had a very clear plan for how to work together to save the dolphin. 

Praise for Aron's If I Could Win? 

• I liked all the description you had about people, like when he came home from sneaking away to the scrap yard, that his parents were waiting on the porch, and how they didn't look happy.
• I liked how you made everything seem so real,  like his mom made him go to bed at 8:00. His parents seemed so overprotective, even though he's 18. 
• I like how even though it's short, you really created an entire storyline. It was fast-paced and kept my attention.
• I liked how at the beginning he was kind of rusty and had to overcome a few obstacles, and then at the end he won his race.

Praise for Bailey's The Stunt

• You had a ton of chapters, but the way you eased them together made it really flow.
• I liked when your character met Katie and said, "I might have a little crush on her."
• You used great description like, "They ran down stairs so fast you would have thought they teleported."
• I liked relationship you created between Eric and his brother. They were constantly being trouble makers and calling each other names that were very quick witted and fitting to the situation, like "Hey, weatherman..." when Kyle came in yelling about a  tornado.